Endless Imago
In this never ending story there's a mocking lacuna,
one that's too wide to ever build a bridge across.
And here we stand on opposite ends,
pouring our souls deeper into a miasma
that's already taken everything we never had.
And I've spent years wondering if this was ever real,
or just a dream from a time of innocence
that I never let go of when I was supposed to.
I oscitate at the things we will never know,
unwilling to just close this door and step away,
because I remember the synchronicity we shared
even though it was a lifetime ago.
It is the one thing that cannot be taken;
the only thing we have as the chasm gets deeper,
the distance grows wider,
and the weight of our own hearts drag us under.
Word definitions:
Imago: an idealized concept of a loved one, formed in childhood and retained unaltered in adult life.
Miasma : noxious exhalations from putrescent organic matter; poisonous effluvia or germs polluting the atmosphere. A dangerous, foreboding, or deathlike influence or atmosphere.
Lacuna : a gap or missing part.
Oscitate : to gape; to yawn.Synchronicity: an apparently meaningful coincidence in time of two or more similar or identical events that are causally unrelated
Really dreamy and atmospheric, love it.
ReplyDeleteAE, I like your free verse poem. It has a nice unity of tone to it and the voice remains steady throughout. It gives a sharp, clear sense of what the protagonist feels about the relationship.
ReplyDeleteWow, that's kind of sad. Very good description. ; )
ReplyDeleteReally like the mood this sets, dreamy in a way. I've never been able to write poetry - really enjoyed reading this. Well done.
ReplyDeleteVery flowy and poetic. Your rhythmic sentences really had a soothing, calming effect. Nice!
ReplyDeleteGreat job! :)
I like it. It's interesting how these words incite thoughts of dreams. I think posting the definitions was a good idea. Good luck with the contest.
ReplyDeleteI love the way you say "the things we never had" Nice job. Mine is #29
ReplyDeleteI would never have thought of turning it into poetry, but you made an excellent job of it. Lovely!
ReplyDeletePoetry is represented in this challenge quite well! Your lines flowed nicely, and the poem had a melancholy to it that reminded me of thinking back over a happy time or thing that is now lost. ~ Nadja
ReplyDeleteDeeply sad. Love the poetic prose
ReplyDeletewhere is the hope? how do they reconnect?
ReplyDeletegreat job!
This really pulled me in, I love the poetry format! Nicely done!
ReplyDeleteLove the poetry! And so beautifully written, too! I kinda want to go back now and turn mine into a poem.
ReplyDeleteAwesome prose, so well done and it flowed nicely. Great job with the challenge. I'm #34 and new follower:)
ReplyDeleteGreat poem, A.E. I’m glad to be reading so many poems. I did one myself.
ReplyDeleteHow lovely! Very evocative, both of mood and a story I want to know now...
ReplyDeleteI love the line about the bridge A.E. Well done!
ReplyDeleteGreat poem! I did a poem, too. #33.
ReplyDeleteLovely poem and great use of the words.
ReplyDeleteBeautiful. I really enjoyed it.
ReplyDeleteImpressive job meeting the 2nd challenge!
ReplyDeleteWow, I've read a bunch of these entries and I think yours is one of the best. I think those words lend themselves much better to poetry. You adapted them beautifully! Well done!!
ReplyDeleteThis was very nice. Loved it! Great job
ReplyDeleteBeautiful. There are so few poems and you did a great job getting those words in.
ReplyDeleteOh. Sad. Lovely haunting.
ReplyDeleteThis piece flowed nicely, even though it is very sad. Good writing.
ReplyDeleteGreat job, well done. Good usage of required words, woven neatly into a story of lost love.
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Really good job. This flowed and I loved the emotion, even though I feel the sadness and longing. Voting :)
ReplyDeleteThanks a lot for all the great comments everyone!
ReplyDeleteYour poem flowed really well and the required words were not jarring at all. Great job!
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