Thursday, September 22, 2011

Second Campaigner Challenge - Endless Imago

Our second campaigner challenge from Rach Writes is to write a blog post in any format (flash fiction, poem, etc,) using the word "Imago" in the title and incorporating the words lacuna, miasma, oscitate and synchronicity in the piece. An added challenge is to make it 200 words exactly and make reference to a mirror. I decided to go with a poem; the meaning of the words inspired me to write something poetic and with darker emotions. (My entry is number 31)

Endless Imago

In this never ending story there's a mocking lacuna,
one that's too wide to ever build a bridge across.
And here we stand on opposite ends,
pouring our souls deeper into a miasma
that's already taken everything we never had.
And I've spent years wondering if this was ever real,
or just a dream from a time of innocence
that I never let go of when I was supposed to.
I oscitate at the things we will never know,
unwilling to just close this door and step away,
because I remember the synchronicity we shared
even though it was a lifetime ago.
It is the one thing that cannot be taken;
the only thing we have as the chasm gets deeper,
the distance grows wider,
and the weight of our own hearts drag us under.



Word definitions:

Imago: an idealized concept of a loved one, formed in childhood and retained unaltered in adult life.

Miasma : noxious exhalations from putrescent organic matter; poisonous effluvia or germs polluting the atmosphere. A dangerous, foreboding, or deathlike influence or atmosphere.

Lacuna : a gap or missing part.

Oscitate : to gape; to yawn.

Synchronicity: an apparently meaningful coincidence in time of two or more similar or identical events that are causally unrelated


30 comments:

  1. Really dreamy and atmospheric, love it.

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  2. AE, I like your free verse poem. It has a nice unity of tone to it and the voice remains steady throughout. It gives a sharp, clear sense of what the protagonist feels about the relationship.

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  3. Wow, that's kind of sad. Very good description. ; )

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  4. Really like the mood this sets, dreamy in a way. I've never been able to write poetry - really enjoyed reading this. Well done.

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  5. Very flowy and poetic. Your rhythmic sentences really had a soothing, calming effect. Nice!

    Great job! :)

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  6. I like it. It's interesting how these words incite thoughts of dreams. I think posting the definitions was a good idea. Good luck with the contest.

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  7. I love the way you say "the things we never had" Nice job. Mine is #29

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  8. I would never have thought of turning it into poetry, but you made an excellent job of it. Lovely!

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  9. Poetry is represented in this challenge quite well! Your lines flowed nicely, and the poem had a melancholy to it that reminded me of thinking back over a happy time or thing that is now lost. ~ Nadja

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  10. Deeply sad. Love the poetic prose

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  11. where is the hope? how do they reconnect?
    great job!

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  12. This really pulled me in, I love the poetry format! Nicely done!

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  13. Love the poetry! And so beautifully written, too! I kinda want to go back now and turn mine into a poem.

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  14. Awesome prose, so well done and it flowed nicely. Great job with the challenge. I'm #34 and new follower:)

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  15. Great poem, A.E. I’m glad to be reading so many poems. I did one myself.

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  16. How lovely! Very evocative, both of mood and a story I want to know now...

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  17. I love the line about the bridge A.E. Well done!

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  18. Great poem! I did a poem, too. #33.

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  19. Lovely poem and great use of the words.

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  20. Beautiful. I really enjoyed it.

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  21. Impressive job meeting the 2nd challenge!

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  22. Wow, I've read a bunch of these entries and I think yours is one of the best. I think those words lend themselves much better to poetry. You adapted them beautifully! Well done!!

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  23. This was very nice. Loved it! Great job

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  24. Beautiful. There are so few poems and you did a great job getting those words in.

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  25. This piece flowed nicely, even though it is very sad. Good writing.

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  26. Great job, well done. Good usage of required words, woven neatly into a story of lost love.

    #188

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  27. Really good job. This flowed and I loved the emotion, even though I feel the sadness and longing. Voting :)

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  28. Thanks a lot for all the great comments everyone!

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  29. Your poem flowed really well and the required words were not jarring at all. Great job!

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